Dust of Unearned Stories

May 12, 2011

in Confessions,Lifestyle

Leaves of past stories covered the ground -
broken, torn, without life.

You spread a quilt over the leaves
and pulled me down beside you
to tell old stories and make new
until roots burst forth contained
no longer by fallow ground. Not so silently
from the valley, a blue updraft
of dust and seeds and wings.

My dreams were the color of turquoise
and the river thanked me
for adding to her depth.
Strong current pulling away from lies.

Too fast. Too far. Too strong
without raft or paddle.
Unprepared. Unaware.

So you folded me up and
left me to collect dust.

{ 39 comments }

Tracy May 12, 2011 at 2:51 pm

I loved that thank you for sharing

Su-sieee! Mac May 13, 2011 at 2:54 am

Strong images! Your words have me remembering many years back rafting down the Rio Grande, which for me was a movement forward.

margo roby May 13, 2011 at 10:19 am

I love this. It took me by surprise and I love poems that do that, so thank you.

pamelasayers May 13, 2011 at 11:04 am

Very pretty poem.
Pamela

Elizabeth May 13, 2011 at 11:58 am

Surprise ending. I like the lines you chose and wove so skillfully together. A proper farewell,
 
Elizabeth

Amanda May 13, 2011 at 12:10 pm

This is how poems should be like. :)

brenda w May 13, 2011 at 12:34 pm

Lovely poem. You brought up a strong desire for river travel.  It's almost time to play!  Thank you.

Joseph Harker May 13, 2011 at 1:06 pm

It's interesting how different these poems with the same lines are turning out to be… this one is much more bittersweet then the other two centos (centi?) I've gotten through so far. Love that river "adding to her depth" line especially.

Judie May 13, 2011 at 1:56 pm

This is an excellent piece. I very quickly found myself inside it.  I will be back for more!!

lissa May 13, 2011 at 6:19 pm

wonderful words to enjoy.
have a sweet day.

Kim Nelson May 13, 2011 at 6:41 pm

You created deep sadness by weaving together others' lines with your own. Masterful

Henry Clemmons May 13, 2011 at 7:12 pm

You owned me from beginning to end.  Great job of knitting all those lines together and creating such emotion and paint such a vivid picture.  Excellent

Cathy May 13, 2011 at 8:03 pm

Love how you use my fold me up line and made it even more sadder. Very good poem

vivienne blake May 14, 2011 at 1:08 am

There's been some kind of magic hovering over the Tent for this prompt, which has brought out an absolute feast of poetry, including your delightful piece. 

Mr. Walker May 14, 2011 at 8:33 am

A great take on the lines you chose; you wove them together well. I love that middle stanza; the way you tied together dreams, river, and lies. Great title, too.
Richard

Deb May 14, 2011 at 9:07 am

Love the atmosphere in this, sad yet pretty, tender. 
Thank you for being part of the tent, Lindsey. It's been a pleasure to read your poems.

KDL May 14, 2011 at 11:10 pm

Thanks for sharing your lovely poem.

nan May 15, 2011 at 8:40 am

The structure of this poem is excellent — I love how the energy explodes in the second to last stanza, and then dissolves in the last.

Jenny Matlock May 18, 2011 at 8:26 am

Holy criminy.   Girl!  You can write!   This was beautiful…so textured with emotions and visualizations.   Really profound.
 
Thanks for an amazing stop on our little journey through Alphabe-Thursday's letter "D".
 
I'm glad you joined us.   This was amazing.
 
Thank you.
 
A+

Alie May 18, 2011 at 8:49 pm

Very beautiful!

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Jessica @FoundtheMarbles May 18, 2011 at 8:49 pm

That was beautiful.  Thanks for sharing it.

Karolina May 18, 2011 at 8:49 pm

Visiting from comment hour! Thanks for sharing this! 

webly May 18, 2011 at 8:50 pm

Lovely poem.
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Ann Odle May 18, 2011 at 8:50 pm

Stopping by from the Comment Hour; I love your writing! Did you take that photo? Its gorgeous!

JDaniel4's Mom May 18, 2011 at 8:51 pm

JDaniel and I love to collect leaves and sort through them. Wonderful poem!

ManWifeDog May 18, 2011 at 8:51 pm

Beautiful!!! I need to start writing poetry again. I adore your blog! :-)

Handy Man, Crafty Woman May 18, 2011 at 8:51 pm

Great post! I love the pretty color of your blog.  Came over from the SITS comment hour.

Kari May 18, 2011 at 8:51 pm

It was beautiful-thank you for sharing! Here from #commenthour-congrats for being picked. 
 
Kari

TheProDiva May 18, 2011 at 8:52 pm

Beautiful!

Amy May 18, 2011 at 8:54 pm

I admire those that can write such beautiful poetry. Good for you!

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Ginger May 18, 2011 at 8:57 pm

Great poem! It's beautiful!
 
Ginger
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Catalina May 18, 2011 at 9:03 pm

Your words were as lovely as the photo. Simply beautiful!

Victoria May 18, 2011 at 9:20 pm

So inspired by your poem- beautiful!

Stephanie Snyder May 18, 2011 at 9:50 pm

Truly beautiful writing!

Diane @ OhDiane May 18, 2011 at 10:37 pm

Love the poem and love the picture as well.

Gloria @ Down Comforter Reviews May 19, 2011 at 1:03 am

I love reading poems. I guess is the passion that derives from the words used. I must say that you have a talent for writing poems, the passion of each line. You did a pretty awesome work here. Cheers!

2commentaristas May 19, 2011 at 2:54 am

It's quite rare for me to find poetry that I like, let alone connect to… but in reading yours, I did feel like it was telling me a story that I could easily envision and feel comfortable in.  Thank you so much for sharing it, and the picture at the end is lovely, as well!

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Elizabeth May 19, 2011 at 12:49 pm

I need to go back and reread! very powerful!
 
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Andy May 20, 2011 at 2:46 pm

You took me by surprise with the ending.
Good job!

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